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The dawn is breaking slowly
    shedding light over the sleeping world
New life, new loves, new glories,
    Come as the sun stretches radiant fingers out to the world

Young man awakes and sees the sun,
    closes his eyes and drifts in dream
Alone, but not lonely, one man shunned
    closes his eyes and comes apart at the seams

The moon is shining brightly
    painting the world in silver lies
Old life, old loves, old glories,
    fade as the sun burns through lunar disguise

Young man stares out his window
    wishing she were near
One man sitting at his window,
    wastches Luna and sheds a tear

Sun and moon forever dance
    as life dances on below
Following the stars in heavenly trance
    unable to see, unable to know
:shrug:

Wrote it last night thinking about my girl friend.
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Sparx100 Featured By Owner Apr 11, 2007
Oh my gosh. I love it. This is beautiful, honestly. Other than that little spelling error, I have no critique on it. This is my favorite part:

"The moon is shining brightly
painting the world in silver lies
Old life, old loves, old glories,
fade as the sun burns through lunar disguise"

"...painting the world in silver lies.." is such a nice line. It has so much imagery and emotion behind it.
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Koeryn Featured By Owner Apr 11, 2007
Wow, thank you, it's not often I have people tell me their favorite parts ^^;
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Sparx100 Featured By Owner Apr 11, 2007
Oh.. sorry, was I not supposed to do that? :blushes:
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Koeryn Featured By Owner Apr 11, 2007
lol, it's fine ^^
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krissaan Featured By Owner Mar 20, 2007
It's so cute :hug:
She's so lucky :D
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Koeryn Featured By Owner Mar 20, 2007
:hug: Thanks, and nah, I'm the lucky one ^^;
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artperfectionist Featured By Owner Feb 17, 2007
wow thats amazing! i really like the way you wrote it 2...its just amazing!
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Koeryn Featured By Owner Feb 17, 2007
Aye, that one does seem a bit popular ^^;
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Tara-San Featured By Owner Feb 17, 2007  Hobbyist Digital Artist
This is so cute. :+fav: Really great idea with the sun and the moon. :D
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Koeryn Featured By Owner Feb 17, 2007
It's an old idea, but thanks :)
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